Title: Immortal Girls
Immortal girls was a title I excitedly picked up with nothing but enthusiasm. Sadly, though, this would be misplaced. The story is one of a group of immortal girls who are tasked with fighting evil in a historical context.
Normally this would be the kind of book I would eat up, but something about the writing stye missed the mark for me. There were a number of times when I firmly disliked the writing in a way that was hard to move past.
One of the first things I noticed when picking up this book was that the prologue felt misplaced and could/should have been deleted or changed. It doesn't compel the reader to continue reading and, at times, in fact, does the opposite.
The childlike perspective of Skylar loses me in that it seems unrealistic and to have been written without the author having ever been around children. With this in mind though, there were moments in Rachel's perspective that caught my attention and managed to hold it, if only for a short while.
Descriptions in this book fell flat and needed more sensory details to ground the reader in the otherwise bland settings that never came to life. Along with these issues, there was the ever present dialogue that often sounded stiff just like the characterizations presented.
The author included an excessive amount of info dumping that is daunting to any reader looking to start this particular novel. The events also, maybe because of the previous fact, feel disjointed and unconnected. There were blatant spelling and grammar errors littering the pages which work to pull the reader out of the story.
Overall this style of writing creates no connection between us as the reader and the story that is being told. I wanted to like this book for its historical context and, admittedly, the beauty of the cover, but it fell short of my expectations. The concept itself is good and actually peeked my interest enough to pick it up, but when I opened the book I was sadly left with flat characters and a plot that never intrigued me enough to actually want to continue.